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by surreal_chameleon
Fri Oct 19, 2018 5:33 pm
Forum: Wolf Hall
Topic: Magical Diary: Wolf Hall (Early development thread)
Replies: 152
Views: 36226

Re: Magical Diary: Wolf Hall

I'd cut Grabner's "I am a living reminder--" line. The length of his sequence is out of sync with the pacing of the other ones and his dialogue will have more dramatic punch if you leave the first line out. Was thrilled to see the individual at the 28 second mark, if she's who I think she is.
by surreal_chameleon
Wed Dec 10, 2014 8:42 pm
Forum: Black Closet
Topic: Elsa
Replies: 11
Views: 6243

Re: Elsa

The main problem I have with the choose-every-response style of interaction is that the protagonist's responses are usually limited to a single sentence. It's difficult to describe one's feelings or experiences within such a small space and providing more choices doesn't necessarily solve the proble...